In the Modern Times young children spending less time with their family and more time with their friends why has this change occurred do you think the parents should force children to spend a time at home

In recent years, young ones
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more
time
with their peers rather than
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birthgivers
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birth givers
this
essay is an attempt to discuss the reasons behind
this
phenomena
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in the subsequent paragraph prior to the meaningful conclusion.
To begin
with, there are
myraid
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myriad
reasons behind
this
.
first
and foremost,
busy
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schedule of their
parents
to explain it as we know nowadays the
parents
give more preference to their work to
fulfill
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their basic needs and they have no
time
for their children
as a result
youngsters feel bored at home so that's why the teenagers and more
time
with their peers and play a lot of activities which rejuvenate themselves.
for instance
, according to the
last
survey conduct
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Charity in Bangladesh where shows 69.72%
youngsters
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time
with their
fellow
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fellows
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rather than with their
parents
.
However
, according to me,
parent
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the parent
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should encourage their children to stay at home because they can stay away from the wrong activities. to commence with, if they spend their
time
with their
birthgivers
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birth givers
they should learn
the
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interpersonal skills.
furthermore
, the
parents
should educate them.
what
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is good or what is bad
as a result
they do not mix with their agemates to make
crime
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.to set an example ,according to the
last
news
the
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30% of
the
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youngsters
involved
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in
the
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criminal activities owing to their peers. To
excapsulate
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encapsulate
, it could be concluded that
,
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all children like to spend
time
with their agemates. because of their loneliness. yet I believe that their
parents
give the
time
to
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their
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rejuvinles
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rejuvenates
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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