Men do most of the high-level jobs. Should the company encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women What is your opinion on that? Use your own knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

İt is considered by some people that
men
do most of the high-level
jobs
. I completely disagree with the
opinion
and in my
opinion
, the
company
should encourage a certain percentage of these
jobs
to be reserved for
women
and equality between
men
and
women
.
Firstly
, the
company
generally prefer
men
over
women
therefore
, the proportion of
women
in
companies
experienced a decrease .
Thus
, bad opinions expose among people
such
as only
men
can work in the best
jobs
or
women
can be
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.
On the other hand
, these considerations
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many troubles
such
as inequality between
women
and
men
or unsuccess in
jobs
.
For instance
, the increased incomes of
companies
can increase thanks to
women
if
companies
will give
women
a chance . Another point to consider is that
companies
should encourage a certain percentage of these
jobs
to be reserved for
women
. İn my
opinion
, there are many important
women
such
as scientists
women
or teachers
women
and
women
can help for
company
and
the
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of
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the government if
companies
give
women
jobs
right .
For instance
, according to my experience , ı entered a
job
two years ago and by the way , any
women
didn't work in
this
company
. Afterwards , a
job
is given to me by my manager to solve the trouble but ı couldn't solve it .
Thus
the
company
took
women
to solve the trouble one year later and she could solve the trouble . I mean , many
women
can help
companies
when they have a
job
right in
companies
. İn conclusion , the
company
should encourage a certain percentage of these
jobs
to be reserved for
women
thus
, many
women
can rescue from bad things which seen and
also
,
companies
can acquire more income when they give to
women
a
job
right . İn my
opinion
, society shouldn't say '
men
do most of the high-level
jobs
' because
women
can do most of the high-level
jobs
.
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