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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past 30 years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Most
people
 across the world own a car nowadays and
the
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last
 30 years
traffic
 jam has massively increased. I completely agree with
this
 statement and I will elaborate on the actions that the
government
 should take to discourage
people
 from using their own vehicles. In Mauritius, most families own at least a car,
moreover
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 husband and wife may
also
 have each their own cars. Unfortunately,
this
 progression is causing huge roadblocks mainly for those who should go
in
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 the capital. The
government
 has taken some measures to have trams in our country, definitely reducing
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te
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traffic
 jams. Adding up, our local authorities have doubled the price of petrol, resulting
to
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a
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lesser usage of cars. Now, we can see that many
people
 are opting for
car pooling
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 which I do practice as it
reduce
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 the number of cars on the road In China, the
government
 has
use
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 another methodology,
that
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 is providing bikes to the population so that they may move
in
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 towns. The advantage of
this
 method is that it reduces
traffic
 jams,
people
 are healthier and it reduces pollution. Personally, I believe that the
government
 should find more measures to reduce
traffic
jam
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. More trams and facilities
of
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 public transport should be available to
people
 at
more
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 regular time and in different areas. Each
people
 should analyse whether they really need to drive short distances or will it be better to ride a bike.
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