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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past 30 years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Most
people
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 across the world own a car nowadays and
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 30 years
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 jam has massively increased. I completely agree with
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 should take to discourage
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 from using their own vehicles. In Mauritius, most families own at least a car,
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 husband and wife may
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 have each their own cars. Unfortunately,
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 progression is causing huge roadblocks mainly for those who should go
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 the capital. The
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 has taken some measures to have trams in our country, definitely reducing
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traffic
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 jams. Adding up, our local authorities have doubled the price of petrol, resulting
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lesser usage of cars. Now, we can see that many
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 are opting for
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 which I do practice as it
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 the number of cars on the road In China, the
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 has
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 another methodology,
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 is providing bikes to the population so that they may move
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 towns. The advantage of
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 method is that it reduces
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 jams,
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 are healthier and it reduces pollution. Personally, I believe that the
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 should find more measures to reduce
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jam
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. More trams and facilities
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 public transport should be available to
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 at
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 regular time and in different areas. Each
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 should analyse whether they really need to drive short distances or will it be better to ride a bike.
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