Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The discussion about what is the right
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seems to become more and more present in many countries around the world. It is being said that there should be some exceptions in the current legislation and some jobs should be allowed to retire earlier. I agree with
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of all, the main argument
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conditions is that not all professions are the same and
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they should not be treated equally. Some jobs are just more demanding than others and require either extended physical endurance,
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emotional resilience, or both. For
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to work for the same amount of time. Another reason in favour of
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early
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is that certain
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deserve
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special treatment due to their service to society and setting an earlier
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would be a sort of reward and acknowledgement of these demanding
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. As stated before, I
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that there are certain occupations that should be taken care of on the governmental level by enjoying an early
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firemen
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, soldiers,
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policemen
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, doctors or any other public-service occupations.
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career life is much more intense than a work life of a salesman,
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.
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, they deserve to receive their pension earlier,
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without
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without
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. To conclude, it needs to be pointed out that there are good reasons for setting different
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depending on the type of work. There are jobs that deserve
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special treatment and
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should be provided by each government.
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