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GLOBAL ENVIRONMENT ISSUES ARE THE RESPONSIBILITY OF RICH NATIONS AND NOT POORER NATIONS. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE?

#environment #responsibility #nations
Just as the saying goes, ‘No matter whether you are rich or poor, it's always your responsibility to save an
environment’
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, it aims at telling us the importance of concerning global
environment
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 issues in order to make our earth healthy.
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, it is definitely worth
for
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us
paying
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 more attention to issues relating to the global environment and doing our best to solve the environmental problems if any. Everyone in the world should take responsibility for environmental problems as he or she belongs to one of the members living in the world.
For instance
, if it is full of rubbish and harmful insects in our living place, it is impossible for us to have a stable life in
such
 a dirty environment. What is more, nobody is willing to live in
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 place which has several kinds of
pollutions
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,
such
 as air, land, noise, sea pollution, etc. It is because the adverse effects of those pollutions not only affect our health in a negative way, but they
also
 influence various aspects of the place, city or country badly, regarding social or economic situation.
For example
, when a country has
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serious air pollution, it is absolutely sure that none of the tourists would like to travel to that country.
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,
this
 will make the situation of
its
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tourism worse.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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