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The charts Below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the word. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relevant.

The charts Below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the word. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relevant.
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The given pie charts make comparisons
regions
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between regions
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 of the world in terms of
water
 consumption. (industrial
use
, agricultural
use
, and domestic
use
)
Overally
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Overall
, substantial
water
 is consumed by agricultural
use
 in Africa, Central Asia,
South-east
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Southeast
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 Asia and South
America
,
while
 industrial
use
 makes up the majority of North American and European total
water
 utilization. To initiate, As can be seen from represented charts, the trends in North
America
 and Europe are approximately similar. 48% and 53% of total
water
use
in
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is in
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 North
America
 and Europe,
whereas
 39% and 32% of whole
water
 usage go to stated counties. The figures for domestic
use
 in North
America
 and Europe are 13% and 15%.
Moreover
,
it is clear that
 industrial
use
 contributes 7%, 5% ad 10% in Africa, Central Asia and South
America
 to the total
water
 consumption which is the lowest amount of
water
 consumption,
whereas
 the minority of
water
 usage for The
South-east
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Southeast
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 is domestic
use
 at 7%.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, america with synonyms.
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