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Competing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job, on the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both sides give your opinion.

#university #education #job #hand #people #skills
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It is considered by some
people
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 think that being a
university
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 graduate is the key benefit to getting a good
job
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, while others believe it is good to have
experience
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 and soft
skills
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. In my opinion, I believe that having a
university
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education
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 is essential for academic jobs while soft
skills
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 and
experience
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 are more useful in managerial businesses.
Firstly
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, many
people
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 think it is easier to get a good
job
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 if they have a
university
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 degree. In another word, having a
university
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education
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 puts
people
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 one step ahead compared with others who do not. The competition to get into universities and the increasing number of graduates show how significant
this
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 level of
education
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 is for
people
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's future
work
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 opportunities. In my opinion, whether needing high-level
education
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 or
skills
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 and
experience
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, depends on the
position
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 being applied for. Take
for example
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 law, medicine or teaching, it is impossible to enter a
position
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 without the required high educational qualification.
On the other hand
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, having
work
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experience
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 and soft
skills
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such
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 as interpersonal
skills
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 and leadership
skills
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 help in
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getting a good
job
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position
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. It is often thought that having relevant
work
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experience
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 can be valuable to a company.
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, in business, it would be more important for a candidate to have soft
skills
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 and
experience
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 so they can step into a
position
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 without
further
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 training and would
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 benefit
of
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the company. In conclusion, after a thorough analysis of the topic, getting a good
job
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 requires a relevant background either in
experience
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 or
education
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 qualification depending on
type
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the type
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 of
work
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 and field.
People
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 should make sure they attain the necessary skill or degree before applying for a
job
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 in order to be sure of success
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • specialized training
  • networking
  • baseline requirement
  • financial burden
  • hands-on experience
  • practical skills
  • soft skills
  • dynamic job market
  • entrepreneur
  • formal education
  • portfolio
  • hybrid approach
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