Traffic jams are a serious problem in many large cities today. How should we deal with this problem?
It is widely acknowledged that
transportation
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support the opinion that traffic jams are dramatically problems
in many urban areas. However
, from my point of view, I agree with the previous point and have various solution ways to deal with this
problem. In the following paragraphs, the reasons to support my agreement and solve in
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of all, I strongly believe that the proportion of people
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. It is undeniable that the previous points, I describe that
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transportation
. That all the ideas to deal with these problems
.
In conclusion, I personally agree with this
viewpoint because it seems to me that bad transportation
in some countries are the main causes
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