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In the past, people lived in one place for a long time, but now they can live in many different places, what are the reasons? Is this a positive or negative development?

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Long ago,
people
 lived in a single place for quite a long time but nowadays with globalisation and transport facilities,
people
move
 easily across different towns and
countries
. We will
further
 discuss
on
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the advantages of moving to different places and its inconveniences. Some
people
 are so attached to their hometown
and
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that
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 they find themselves in their comfort zone. So, they prefer to stay in their own town.
However
,
people
 decide to
move
 to other places and
countries
 for education purposes, for
working
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 and to get the opportunity to learn the culture and traditions of
other
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others
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 across the world. The advantages of working in several
countries
 are that
people
 can
to
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learn about different cultures,
adapting
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 themselves to several situations and they increase their knowledge skills.
Moreover
, they get experience globally which is an asset for the company they work for. When
people
move
 to another
country
,
this
increase
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its
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the
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workforce and helps in its economic development. Moving to another
country
 may be an inconvenience as in some places, they could be welcomed but in other
countries
, they can face discrimination or are even not accepted.
Unfortunately
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 these
people
 feel really depressed and they sometimes leave their families, so they feel lonely and sad.
However
, these situations make them grow and face the difficult world.
As
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a
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conclusion, I believe that there
are
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 more positivity for someone to
move
 to another
country
 rather than negativity as one person moving to another
country
 is enriched with cultures and knowledge.
Furthermore
, they contribute
in
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the
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globalisation development.
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