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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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To start off with, some people believe that
students
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 should learn the science of
food
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 and how to make it.
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, Others consider that school
time
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 must be used for essential subjects. Positives: prepare meal practically, they have fun while cooking, they never get poisoned, do something about
food
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 make us relax, Negatives: Maybe someone get injured while cooking, student use dangerous things like knife, other subjects have a short
time
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, the government have to pay for
food
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 P2 As stated above, there are some advantages and disadvantages. The
students
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 are able to prepare meals practically.
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, they will spend less
time
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 at lunch.
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, they will have fun while they are cooking and
students
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 know very well about the
food
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 chemical.
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, they never get poisoned because of the
food
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.
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, cooking something with
food
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 makes them more relaxed.
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, maybe some
students
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 will get injured during the
lessons
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 and
students
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 have to keep their eyes open since they will use the knife. Another negative way, other subjects have a short
time
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.
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, the government has to pay for these
lessons
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. P3 I see eye to eye with the
students
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 should learn the science of
food
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 and how to make it. They will be glad to learn
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 from their teachers. and probably will live alone when they graduate from the school. If they want to be healthy, they must eat homemade meals.
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, I haven't got any
lessons
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 like that so I'm generally eating fast
food
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. I think I'm not healthy. Unfortunately, I wish to learn how to prepare the
foods
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.
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, my cousin Gül lives in Vienna, studying gastronomy and she is wise about the
foods
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, always prepares
food
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 quickly when we get hungry. If i learn some skills from school i'm not surprised so much. My country has great traditional
foods
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. All the world knows
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. Turkish schools should give some
lessons
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 about traditional
foods
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 and how to make them so our society will get healthy more than before. Changing starts from the young people.
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, I believe that
students
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 should learn the science of
food
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 and how to make it. People are eating every
time
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 but they aren't studying
lessons
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 every
time
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. They always use information about the
food
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.
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