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n many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people consider it valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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The given table compares different areas in the UK in terms of the change
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 the figure of people cycling to work between 2001 to 2011. Overall, it is clear that inner
London
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 has the highest figure of all areas in the given years, whereas
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Gateshead had the lowest.
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, though Outer
London
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 had the
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 highest number among all regions, the increase rate it presented was the least. Looking
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 at Inner
London
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 and Brighton Hover, these two areas witness the highest percentage change. The former rose from 43494 in 2001 and 106219 in 2011, increasing by 144
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, and that of Brighton and hover had a 109
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 growth. Moving onto Outer
London
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, the area had the
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 highest number of people cycling to work;
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, the percentage change it presented, at only 45
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, is the lowest. While Gateshead had the least figure in the given years, the percentage still increased by 61
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