Shops should not be allowed to sell any food or drinks that have been scientifically proven to be bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Government
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should not allow food industries and local
shops
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, if they find it is not good for
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health
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then
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they should not permit the particular
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This
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essay discusses why I strongly agree with the statement. There are two main reasons, why harmful food products should not allow their product to sell in the market.
firstly
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, people
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more fast foods and carbonated drinks even when they do not know
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how it is made and what
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the substance added
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the food. It is not their fault because due to
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busy schedule they did not have time to research
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what they eat. In fact, if
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government
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takes regular inspections in the
shops
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then
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they can easily ban the
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which are causing
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issues.
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,
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of the local
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do not have
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licence from the
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to run their business and
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they are not put any labels
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ingredients that they added
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their product. There are
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of young children drinking
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carbonated
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causing
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health
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issues. To summarise
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Government
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should not
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allow
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shops
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issues
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Regulations
  • accountability
  • retailers
  • public health
  • consumer choice
  • diet
  • banning
  • health education
  • awareness campaigns
  • economic impact
  • job losses
  • small businesses
  • complexity
  • beneficial
  • harmful
  • quantity consumed
  • individual health conditions
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