Some think that people should not change their jobs while others think they should because it brings advantages for themselves, company and society. Discuss and give opinion

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We are facing
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and more complicated society which lead many
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to change their
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so often. Some
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argue that young
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are easily tired of their work which leads them to find new vocations, but others insist that
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who have several
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could have more flexibility. In
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essay, both views will be discussed.
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of all, as
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society is getting more changing, sticking
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one
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could guarantee us
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survive.
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cutting-edge technology
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several decades ago is not any more the latest technology as changing duration is getting shorter and shorter. To catch up
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innovative technology, we keep up
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this
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trend and diversify our
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skills. We have to encourage
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to
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update
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their skills so that they might
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multi-skillful
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which leads to
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diverse
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.
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, some
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insist that it might take a long time to master one
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skill.
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who have specialized ideas
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as doctors and lawyers have spent their whole lives
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those licenses which make them professional. If they were not trained properly
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and gave up their
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, we might lose
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expertise. To provide excellent workers, we have to concentrate on working at one
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and pour out their whole lives as much as they can. Changing
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could have positive and negative effects on our society, but we have to think that losing good workers could have severe
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our
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What we need is
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who have s special knowledge in certain areas
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diverse experience.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job mobility
  • career progression
  • professional development
  • innovation
  • adaptability
  • networking
  • employee turnover
  • workforce allocation
  • job satisfaction
  • skillset diversification
  • stability
  • loyalty
  • job market
  • stagnancy
  • continuous learning
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