Some organization believe that their employee should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appliance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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,
this
is not to say that they are independent, but that their guiding principles adapted by their employee varies in priority. As much as the mode of employee’s
appearance
and work qualities are relevant
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values, my own opinion would be to give more preference to
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that will produce effective
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considering
organization
objectives.
To begin
with, dress codes are organizational symbols believed to contribute to improving customers relationship in an
organization
. Most especially in servicing
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and financial
institution
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.
For instance
,
banks
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workers are
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out with their mode of dressing in order to look presentable to their customers. Another case is the legal firm commonly identified with their symbolic dress code, for proper identification and promotion of fundamental culture the
appearance
of
employee
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has to be
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. Meanwhile, many
producing
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firms are more
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about the
quality
of work delivered by
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the employee
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employee
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. To the extent that they invest more
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workforce by engaging them in
workshop
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and professional training so as to enhance
effective
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and
quality
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.
For instance
, construction firms like Julius Berger
employs
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workers based on her portfolios while
further
engaging them in thorough training right from the onset of employment.
Furthermore
, educational
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give more preference to not only the
appearance
of workers but
also
that of the student. At the same time,
that is
not to neglect the place of
quality
delivery of knowledge
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to
student
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. It is important to note that the values around which employers
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their role are pivotal in actualizing organizational objective.
As a result
, I would recommend the need to evaluate value with respect to the vision and mission of
organization
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for effective delivery. In summary, in terms of workforce priority,
quality
and
appearance
are essential
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value
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to uphold
withing
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an
organization
setting, but more importantly
organization
objective takes the lead in values ranking.
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