A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In today’s world, kindness,
honor
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and trust are less important of a value, rather flamboyant life on social
media
is
regard
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as
the
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measure
of financial achievement. It
is disagreed
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that the individual’s worth should be based on material things
such
as affluent
display
of
wealth
. Subsequent analysis of my reasons will prove
this
. To start with, social
media
status is
deception
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.
For instance
, research has it that a lot of
people
who show off riches on social
media
are either depressed or really poor. The illusive life on social
media
is to paint a life some
people
wish they had not what they are at present. In
this
light, it is important to note that social
media
cannot be used to value peoples’ financial worth.
Furthermore
, the public
display
of
wealth
in
social
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gathering
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is outright
oppression
.
For example
, the criminal department of some African countries published that some youths who venture into crime due to
oppression
in their society or in the virtual space later
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out that these supposed rich
people
are really not as rich as they
seems
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. Actual rich
people
do not publicly
display
their riches rather they engage in community development programs to give back to their society. Clearly, public
show off
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of
wealth
is
oppression
which cannot be used as a prerequisite to
measure
wealth
. Conclusively, trust,
honor
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and kindness are the true
measure
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measures
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of
wealth
. The deception and
oppression
are the only
disaster
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the public
display
of physical health brings to the table. It
is disagreed
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disagrees
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that social
media
status and oppressing the public with
display
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a display
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of
wealth
is a means to
measure
wealth
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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