some jobs are based at a single work place where the hours are the same each day, while other jobs involve frequent travel and irregular working hours. Discuss the advantages of both types of job and give your own opinion about which one is best.

We live in a society where there is a variety of
jobs
with different conditions. Some
jobs
have fixed working
hours
and fixed single
place
whereas there are some
jobs
which are irregular in terms of working
hours
and require long frequent travels. Both
type
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of
jobs
have
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their advantages and inconveniences which I will elaborate in the
next
paragraphs. There are a multitude of benefits when someone has a fixed
job
at a fixed
place
,
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by
people
have
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stability which is very good when they have kids, they can have a proper social life but
also
they can practice a healthy lifestyle as well. Inadvertently, some
people
enjoy having
an
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irregular time and mobile
jobs
as they are always on the move, they meet
people
and they do not get bored.
However
,
this
typical
job
have
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many drawbacks
such
as unstable family life, risk in terms of travelling,
for
example
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a driver of large
trucks
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may need to drive for several days and may face many inconveniences on the road
such
as bad weather mainly when it snows. By obligation and laws enforced in some countries, some
people
do not have
the
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choice for their career path, so they need to work to support their
family
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. Working
at
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a single
place
can
also
have downsides
such
as back and neck pains due to sitting long
hours
in front of either a monitor or a sewing machine. Even
for
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people
working long
hours
and travelling can cause health issues,
for
instance
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a
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air hostess often
suffer
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from leg pain as she needs to walk and stand
during
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long
hours
. In my opinion, the two typical
jobs
which have been discussed have their advantages and pitfalls. Some
people
have the choice to choose their dream
jobs
and others may be forced to do a
job
.
Personally
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I prefer a stable
job
at a single
place
which allows someone to spend more time with
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his family
hisfamily
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his family
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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