Many people complain about stress at work. How can employers reduce stress and what can employees do on their own to resolve this problem?

One of the most important and common
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workplace
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is
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. Many workers worry about it and do complain about work
stress
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stress
and how to deal with it using a pragmatic approach. To commence with, there are multiple arguments as
stress
is built on the staff by
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of workload to be completed in a short period of time.
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the staff feel working under pressure due to unforeseen conditions.
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for five to ten minutes for every productive hour. They
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to stretch their arm and legs followed by massaging their eyes. To elucidate, a Survey conducted by World Health Organisation (W.H.O)
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last
month tells that 80% of
stress
can be relieved by taking short intervals at work. As every problem has its own solutions, every individual should come out of
stress
, if not it I’ll damage their physical and mental health. The possible solutions would
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developing multitasking skills,
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meditation and
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having a healthy diet.
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monthly targets, by
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yoga they can practice
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staying calm which helps
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to think innovative which help them to perform multiple tasks at a time. At the end of the day, health is more important than wealth and work following
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eating habits keeps the staff fit and healthier. To sum up,
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working
professional
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stress
levels can be minimal if they can follow the solutions discussed in the aforementioned paragraphs for a healthy lifestyle.
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