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Guns has been considered the everyday item that must be possessed so as to live in the modern world. Some people say that owning a gun leagally should be prohibited due to numerous problems. Do you agree with the statement above? What problems can a gun possession cause?

Guns
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 been considered
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everyday item that should be possessed so as to live in the current society. Certain people opine that owning a
gun
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leagally
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legally
 should be prohibited due to numerous problems. I agree with
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 view. Admittedly,
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gun
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the gun
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 isn’t a necessary item in
daily
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the daily
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 life of
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 population since they lack
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the
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 reason to use
it
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.
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, the presence of
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a gun
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gun
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guns
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 may put the owner to start the violence.
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 to
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, the
gun
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 possession of individuals allows them to counter the problem
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aggressive
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an aggressive
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 mode. A good illustration of
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 is
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a bank
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 or department store can be robbed by someone who wants to cater to their need.
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,
gun
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 owners can release their instinct to hurt those around
him
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them
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 and may put everything in a worse position.
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, if there is a mad guy who lacks
of
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concentration, there can be somebody shot or
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.
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, certain individuals have argued that possessing
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protect
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themself
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 from danger. So it’s not a reason or necessity to keep
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gun
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a gun
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 as some people don’t have awareness about the weapon. To conclude,
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 of
gun
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 possession outweigh
advantages
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the advantages
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. Since people wouldn’t have
limitation
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limitations
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 and release their instinct for what they desire that it will hurt
to
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anyone and themself.

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