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Because of the global economy. Many goods including what we use as daily basics produced by other countries have to be transported for a long distance. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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As a result
 of economic situations all over the world, some
countries
 export basic needs to areas that are not near them. I believe the advantages corresponding to transport necessary items to different parts of the world are more considerable than the minor disadvantages. On the one hand, a potential drawback of sending goods may be difficult in critical situations. Research findings confirm that whenever a
country
 gets into a problem with another
country
, another
country
 is not able to give them a hand because they are more likely to will be attacked. In that situation, a
country
 without resources finds it difficult to manage its own
country
. Another perceived negative is that poor land
have
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 to pay a lot of money to receive goods.
Although
 these
countries
 are unable to earn much money, they should pay it in
this
 way.
On the other hand
, a primary advantage of exporting is that it can create good jobs for people who are willing to find a suitable career. Developed
countries
 can generate job opportunities lot in transportation or production fields.
As a result
 of
this
, the unemployment rate will decrease. A
further
 benefit is that the production of basic needs in exporting
region
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 leads to a growth standard of living. It can be facilitated living because people do not think about their daily needs. On balance, it is true that exporting goods to other
countries
 would seem disadvantageous under certain circumstances. In my view, its positive effects in terms of making job possibilities and increasing the standard of living in rich
countries
 override the disadvantages.
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