Some people say that computer games are bad for children by all means; others believe that these games are contributing to children’s development. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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of technology is increasing like a flood.Due to
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in mechanism gaming trend among
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beneficial for kids while other reject
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controversy over
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influence in recent
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games
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essential source of technology for developing
children
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mental
ability
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.By playing
games
younger ones can easily memorize the problems.In
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children
find
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difficulty in understanding the questions but when they play
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they can easily
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the hard hurdles of the topic
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, many ott platforms
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been established like youtube.The
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children
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who are very good at playing
games
started their own channels on youtube which makes them socially active
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society and they
also
earn money through these channels.
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mind
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through gaming. On the flip side,
games
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the
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children's
children
childrens
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introvert
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.The
children
who
plays
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games
do not like to talk or interact with others which
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the
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difficulty
of
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understanding
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society.
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, kids getting addicted
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the
games
. They spend
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amount of money
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the
games
.To
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the craze
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pubg is very high in
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recent years. for buying the
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of money .
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, the abovementioned reasons make the
games
harmful for younger ones. In my opinion ,
games
are a good source of enhancing the
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ability .It is
also
very helpful for the
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children
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who find are introverts they can enjoy their own
companies
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by playing
games
.
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,
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children
which are not good
in
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studying but their gaming skills are clean can make their future
career
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in
games
.so in my view gaming is very beneficial for kids. In conclusion,probably
games
has
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some harmful
affects
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upon
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children
but their benefits
also
make the gaming program more efficient.So it is a good way of teaching
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children's
children
childrens
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minds .
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