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Playing a musical instrument is one of the most important achievement for any child. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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The main significant achievement is
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playing a musical
instrument
 life of a child. It is argued that knowing how to play a musical
instrument
 is one of the major aims in a child’s life.
This
 essay totally agrees with
this
 statement.
Firstly
,
this
 essay will discuss
about
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learning a
learning
learninga
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learning a
new
instrument
 helps to have more patience, and
then
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about
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developing communication skills by playing them. As for as I am concerned a musical
instrument
 is a special thing, a hobby which brings you to a new world, the world of art. There are some people who play the
instrument
 professionally ,
however
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 they went through thick and thin to achieve a peak and for
this
 needed more patience.
For instance
, children have to know sheet music, generalized knowledge and repeat playing instruments all time due to the fact that the child will forget how to play. Even, to play totally one melody necessitate to learning every part, every fragment of music and
this
 is not coming in one day, it needed a lot of time,
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. The child develops the qualities of patience by learning to play a musical
instrument
. If the children play the
instrument
 perfectly, they have the opportunity to take part in competitions, in concerts. A
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child
hild
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child
 will become an outgoing personality after every contest because students converse with each other and show themselves as a personality in
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new surroundings. And each time they improve their communication skill and speech. It is proven a person who has seen many environments can get along with many people, and horizons will expand. In conclusion, knowing how to play an
instrument
 is a chance to show themselves in a new sphere and helps improve skills and qualities.
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