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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given bar graph illustrates
sales
 of various types of electronic
games
 around the world from the year 2000 to 2006. As it is presented, amongst the four
games
, handheld
games
 constitute the highest
sales
 with an increasing trend whereas other
sales
 of
games
 have inflated over the
years
. Now, turning into the details, amongst the
games
,
initially
, handheld
games
 constitute the biggest
sales
 (about $10 bn ) followed by console
games
 with about $5.8 bn whereas other two
games
 namely online and mobile phone were nil in the year 2000.
Nonetheless
, the online
games
 were sold
at
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 least about $3bn while the mobile game remained consistently null. Meanwhile, the handled
games
 have risen steadily over
years
 except for two
years
 which has remained static.
Likewise
,
although
 the
sales
 on online and mobile have started from only 2001 and2002 respectively, their revenue increased moderately over the
years
. On contrary, the money generated from
sales
 of console
games
 fluctuated over a period of time.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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