online shopping seems to be replacing the traditional method of buying. however some buyers are sceptical to this practice. discuss both benefits and risks associated with online shopping

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In recent years technology
had
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has
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enabled us to connect with people, explore new information and reshape our ideas. The term shopping is linked with the transaction of goods and commodities between two parties through monetary compensation, a system, which dates back more than 2000 years old. The boom of the internet started in the early 1990s and enabled lots of web pages to emerge from having lots of useful features, it can be websites for pictures, articles, the index of songs and movies or shopping. The trend of online shopping was already hyped in the mid-1990s but still today much of the Indian population is still sceptical about online shopping. One of the several advantages of
this
is,
firstly
items
listed on its website are much
cheap
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than the offline alternative,
then
most of the
items
which aren't available locally are indexed in
this
, and ,
lastly
it has easy consumer grievance redressal processes. After talking about positives, some of its disadvantages are -
items
delivery are usually more than 2-3 business days compared to offline which direct to hand
service
and there is no guarantee whether
items
sent are of
latest
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manufactured product or just old stock from its warehouse. In India, online shopping is greatly dominated by duopoly which is Amazon.com and Flipkart which
provides
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provide
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same-day delivery
service
with the best after-sale
service
.
Although
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However
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the general public is still sceptical regarding purchasing groceries and electronic goods because they are perishable. In conclusion, we can say over the years these online modes of shopping have greatly increased
due to
better after-sale
service
, greater indexed
items
available and an easy consumer grievance redressal process. Meanwhile, these modes are still lacking the better
service
of perishable
items
hence
a lot of better marketing approaches have to be done to remove scepticism from the public mind.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unparalleled convenience
  • vast selection
  • digital platforms
  • comparison shopping
  • impulsive buying
  • aggressive marketing tactics
  • risk of fraud
  • counterfeit goods
  • compromised personal data
  • immediate satisfaction
  • physical examination
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