Some believe that people are naturally born leaders while others feel that leadership skills can develop. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Leadership
quality
is
the
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an
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important factor in society to be a successful
person
. There is
group
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a group
the group
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which
believe
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believes
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that
leading
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leadership
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ability is the talent that
exist
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exists
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in a
person
by birth,
on the other
hand
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there is another segment of
people
who are confident that
leadership
quality
can
be adopt
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be adopted
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by hard
work
, skills and passion.
However
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,However
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in my opinion
leadership
quality
could be by birth and could be developed by hard
work
.
Firstly
, it is obvious in
mind
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the mind
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of some
people
that good
leader
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leaders
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around the world
are
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is
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born with
leadership
quality
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qualities
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, in their opinion, it is a
God gifted
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God-gifted
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talent
that is
being carried by the
person
. Having said that
leadership
quality
could be by birth, though hard
work
is
important
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an important
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factor
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to factor
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in
success
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the success
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of any
person
but
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apply
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, there are some
people
who have extraordinary,
leading
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leadership
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, critical thinking,
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and decision
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decision making
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decision-making
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skill
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skills
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. These
people
can learn quickly anything and can play important roles in organizations and daily life. But born abilities are not enough if they are not organized and brought up
On the other
hand
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,hand
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there is a
second
view of
people
,
that is
,
leadership
quality
can be developed. It is the fact that hard
work
, passion,
achievement
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and achievement
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of goals, plays
vital
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a vital
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role in the success of a
person
. According to
this
opinion, it is the determination of the
person
that
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apply
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how he takes his professional or personal life. A good leader is
the
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apply
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one who
learn
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learns
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from his mistakes and his
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subordinates
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sub ordinates
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subordinates
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.
Moreover
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,Moreover
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leadership
skill
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skills
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can be developed by polishing skills, there are many examples of great leaders who had nothing in their early life but their hard
work
and their self
believe
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beliefs
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helped them to become
the
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apply
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leaders. In conclusion, I belied that
leadership
quality
is the
combinatio
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combination
of both, born
quality
and
the
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apply
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hard
work
. Without hard
work
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,work
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nobody can utilize his abilities. While hard
work
and skill
set
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sets
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can change the way of thinking and
working
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work
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.
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