Due to many young people dropping out from schools , the rate of unemployment is increasing and it effects our society in different ways . In your opinion , how can this situation be improved.

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Because of dropping out youngsters of school, there is an increase in unemployment sharply and it affects every society in different ways.As far as my opinion is concerned,
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is one of the major problems all over the
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and we have to solve
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problem.
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with, studies are now very important all over the
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. To get a job in several careers you have to study and do hard work in your studies.As we as know, without
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you can'
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survive in the
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they are many peoples who are unemployed because they haven'
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done their
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at the time of
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they were enjoying their life by doing bad things,not going to school, college or university.They bunked many important classes and in the
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they can'
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get passing marks and they left their
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because they don'
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have an
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in that and now they are feeling bad for that and thinking about past and feel bad about what they have done wrong things.In our ,society it causes a bad effect on children and children
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think it's good not to be educated.
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, we have to solve
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problem to protect our kids' careers.The solution to
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problem is that we must understand our children before getting him/her to school we should ask them what think they have an
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because
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, if they have an
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in computers,we should support them and get their admission to computer science subject because their
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will make that subject easy for them and they will learn by enjoying it. To conclude in my essay, I must advise students to carry on with their studies because without
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you are nothing to the
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doing good in
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will make your future easier and happier and never give up on the hard times that come in early life but in
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hard time you should believe on your self

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