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Some people view giving presents as an important way to show care to family and friends, others think there are more important things that can be done to show care and love. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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The majority of
people
 think giving presents is the main way to show
care
 to family and friends.While other
people
's view is that showing
care
 and
love
 is more important.As far as my opinion is concerned, I am with those
people
 who think showing
care
 and
love
 to the family is more important.
To begin
 with,who thinks only a present is enough for
people
 it's wrong only your present didn'
t
 give them any type of support families need
love
 and
care
 from their children.Not giving them that thing and telling them you are with them by sitting with them and when they need your
care
 you don'
t
 give them
care
 they will feel unhappy because of that.
On the other hand
,
people
 who give attention to their
parents
love
 them a lot and they
care
 about them.Their
parents
 are one of the lucky
people
 all over the world because nowadays kids didn'
t
 give attention to their
parents
 when they get old they take them to old houses and enjoy their life with their wives and never return back to their
parents
.Children who show
care
 and
love
 to their
parents
 are the best ones because everyone has to die if they spend a good
time
 with their
parents
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parent's
parents'
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parents
 will be happy with them and give them prayers for their whole life. To conclude the essay, I must say that please spend your
time
 with your
parents
 because one day their
parents
 will die and you will remember the good
time
 which you have spent with your
parents
 and please don'
t
 put them in old houses they
love
 you and want to spend their
time
 with you
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