Some people view giving presents as an important way to show care to family and friends, others think there are more important things that can be done to show care and love. Discuss both views and give your opinion

The majority of
people
think giving presents is the main way to show
care
to family and friends.While other
people
's view is that showing
care
and
love
is more important.As far as my opinion is concerned, I am with those
people
who think showing
care
and
love
to the family is more important.
To begin
with,who thinks only a present is enough for
people
it's wrong only your present didn'
t
give them any type of support families need
love
and
care
from their children.Not giving them that thing and telling them you are with them by sitting with them and when they need your
care
you don'
t
give them
care
they will feel unhappy because of that.
On the other hand
,
people
who give attention to their
parents
love
them a lot and they
care
about them.Their
parents
are one of the lucky
people
all over the world because nowadays kids didn'
t
give attention to their
parents
when they get old they take them to old houses and enjoy their life with their wives and never return back to their
parents
.Children who show
care
and
love
to their
parents
are the best ones because everyone has to die if they spend a good
time
with their
parents
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parents
will be happy with them and give them prayers for their whole life. To conclude the essay, I must say that please spend your
time
with your
parents
because one day their
parents
will die and you will remember the good
time
which you have spent with your
parents
and please don'
t
put them in old houses they
love
you and want to spend their
time
with you
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