Some people think that fresh water should be freely available, while others believe governments should tightly control the use of fresh water as it is limited resource. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In recent times ,many
people
believe that abandoning
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days
are methods that contain
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impact
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aim
with
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reducing
air
pollution
.
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, other
people
strongly
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that
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are other processes that could be
taking
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and that processes are more helping in reducing
air
pollution
. Personally speaking , I deeply
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that there are other methods which are more useful in tackling
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the
air
pollution
issue . In
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I’m going to discuss both arguments and outline why I think there are other more useful techniques . To start with , generally ,
car-free
days
are having many unpleasant feedbacks from the
populations
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and that’s because it does make their lives harder .
For instance
, travelling from
one
point to another could be really difficult and that will lead the majority to hate
car-free
days
. In spite of the drawbacks of
car-free
days
, there are several benefits that are worthy to be highlighted .
One
of them is :
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that car-free
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days
always have an immediate difference in
air
pollution
percentages .
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in the Devon news that
a
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one
week of
car-free
could reduce
the
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air
pollution
from 10
percent
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to 8
percent
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. Even though
car-free
have
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a noticeable effect on
air
pollution
;
their
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are other better ways to deal with
this
problem . Searchers have provided that
factories
are
one
of the main reasons for
air
pollution
(more than cars) . So,
for example
,if there is a law that
abolish
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uneconomical friendly
factories
,
factories
will find a way to produce their goods without harming the environment or causing any
air
pollution
;
as a
result
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air
pollution
will be reduced
in
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a
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more significant numbers . To sum up ,
air
pollution
could be solved
by
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other ways
instead
of
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car free
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days
that make
people
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lives harder , I hope governments will take the idea of abolishing unfriendly
factories
so reducing
air
pollution
could
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without harming
people
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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