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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#organisations #employees #dress #value #quality #work #appearance
‘
First
 impression is the
last
impression’
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 is the expression that we hear very frequently. But is that true in today’s business world? Do how you
dress
 matter for the
organizations
 you
work
 for? Well, there are contrasting views about it. Some organisations believe that their employees should
dress
 formally and should appear smart. Whereas, there are other
organizations
 that
prefers
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 the
quality
 of
work
 above your experience. On one hand, there are
organizations
 that deal with a lot of customers and most of
its
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their
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 employees are
client facing
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. In
such
 a situation, they prefer their employees to appear pleasant and formal as they represent the company. Impressing a
client
 is important with not only the
work
 but how you represent the Company.
For instance
, if you are to present in front of a potential
client
, the content and
quality
 of your pitch will matter and so will your appearance. If you wear a formal business suit that will
also
 give you more confidence. To put it in another way, if there are two companies competing to acquire a customer and one team is very formally dressed and the other team is only casually dressed, given that both the teams have
same
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 thing to offer, the customer will be bagged by the team that dresses smartly.
Then
, there are
also
organizations
 which are not
client facing
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. In
such
 places, what matters is your
quality
 of
work
, irrespective of how you
dress
. If your output is not great, no matter how smartly you
dress
, you will not succeed in
such
organizations
.
For example
, if you are an auditor that provides back-end support to your colleagues on the field, in
such
 cases the
quality
 of the output will be of significant importance. In my opinion, in any
organization
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 you should
dress
 smartly. It is important to
dress
 formally to maintain the decorum of the office space. Since you represent not the company but
also
 yourself as an individual, it is important to
dress
 to impress.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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