Some believe that people today have no interest in maintaining the traditional culture of their country or region. Others believe that it is still important to people that we preserve a traditional way of life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Some believe that
people
recently have no interest in sustaining the traditional culture
of their country or region. Others believe that it is still significant to people
that we protect a traditional way of life. This
essay discusses both ideas and gives a conclusion.
Firstly
I agree with the idea that the traditional way of life is still significant for people
. We have to preserve it. Culture
is one of the most effective ways to recognize our country and our history. Extensive research conducted by CNN revealed that knowing and sustaining traditional culture
improves people
's behavior
and ideas. Change the spelling
behaviour
Such
as if someone knows his culture
he will be wise about so many topics. Also
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,Also
Culture
has affected his behavior
positively. We have to preserve our Change the spelling
behaviour
culture
because our culture
reflects big parents such
as grandma and grandfather. İf people
understand their culture
they would be much closer to their grandparents.
Secondly
. Some people
think they do not have to sustain their culture
. They think it is not an interesting topic. A research
conducted recently indicated that almost 99% of Remove the article
Research
people
can sustain their life without knowing the culture
. Communities do not have to know culture
because it is no obligation. The
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People's
people
's interest in history have
been decreasing due to boring topics. It would not affect Change the verb form
has
people
's lives. İt just leads to a lack of knowledge about history and culture
. Traditionally cultures gives
knowledge about Change the verb form
give
past
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the past
However
past is Correct article usage
the past
past
we should focus on now because we can not change Replace the word
passed
past
Correct article usage
the past
therefore
some people
do not interesting
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interested
traditional
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in traditional
culture
.
İn conclusion, Certain people
think sustaining culture
is a perfect idea, however
, some people
do not agree with that idea. Scientists suggested that sustaining culture
is beneficial for the community.Submitted by brsson06 on
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