Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like science and technology are more important than history.

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history is considered
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knowing the historical background of your country is extremely helpful sometimes. When children recognize all value
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their ancestors, they will know the clear performance
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past events as well as be proud of their nation ;
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we need to learn about our past;
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of these skills in every aspect of life.
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of IT and exact sciences is highly
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everywhere. According to recent studies,
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chemistry, physics and so on; only 19%rely on history-regarding
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and other
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sciences.
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government should more focus on
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and it creates awareness about
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background ,
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