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In recent years great attention has been paid for the subject of pollution In rece

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In recent years great attention has been paid
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 the subject of pollution In recent years, great attention has been paid to the topic of who should be the most responsible for the child’s
behavior
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.
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 numerous discussions on
this
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 issue. Some people state that parents and teachers ought to be blamed for crimes committed by young children.
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, some opponents disagree with the above perspective. In
this
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 essay, the argument will be carefully examined to support my opinion. The
first
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 thing to consider is the fact that children’s surroundings drastically affect their
growths
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. According to
the
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 recent report in Japan, about 80
percent
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 of young children responded TV games or computer games were the most inspiring for them to make crimes. Thanks to advanced technology, young children can play violent games
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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