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Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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Several
people
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 are highly concerned that exposure to
violence
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 in
media
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 might harm society.
On the other hand
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, others believe that consuming
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media
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 would not significantly influence
people
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’s behaviour. I firmly believe that violent content has the potential to harm society.
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, it is worth exploring these two opposing views below.
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, TV and computer
games
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 are the most common place for violent content in the
media
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. Most
people
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 would spend their day watching TV and playing
games
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 on their PC. Specifically for young
people
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.
This
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 behaviour will lead to problematic behaviour if we are not careful.
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, there was news reported in Indonesia when a kid stabbed his classmate with a knife, and it was said that he was inspired by the violent act of his favourite character from his computer
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. Despite the obvious evidence, some
people
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 are still not concerned about the
violence
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 shown in the
media
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. They may argue that
media
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 was meant for entertainment, and
people
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 of all ages should be aware of
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.
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, the problem lies when we talk about youngsters who are still quite emotionally unstable and cannot distinguish between fantasy and reality. In
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 case, I believe that the damage of
violence
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 in
media
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 will always be apparent, and
people
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 should not take
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 matter lightly. To summarize, television and computer
games
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 play a more critical role in our society than we can imagine. For the betterment of our community, it is our job as adults to regulate the
violence
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 in
media
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 and protect the young. Especially for young
people
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, as they are still vulnerable and consuming
media
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 most of the time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pivotal
  • desensitize
  • catalyst
  • predisposed
  • harmless outlet
  • distinguish
  • controlled environments
  • empirical research
  • minimal or no direct correlation
  • socio-economic status
  • predisposition
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