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Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge right and wrong and to behave well. Some say that teachers should only teach students about academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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While some people maintain that
teachers
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 should teach
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 about
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right and wrong in daily life and become well-behaviour people, others reject
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 notion, believing that
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 just should teach
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 about academic
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 at school. It is the goal of
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 issue before giving the writer's point of view. On the one hand, there is no denying that
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 who behave well are a desire of both family and teacher so guiding
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 to distinguish the right and wrong of problems is essential and not only are parents responsible but
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teachers
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 play an important role to teach them those statements.
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, when
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 have basic knowledge they will not have inaccurate pictures
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 the world and avoid
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wrong.
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, they
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 enhance their personal growth, either
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. They will
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 maximize their potential in solving problems, managing time, and so on because they have a collection of skills.
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,
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 should focus on teaching academic
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 of teaching soft skills. There are
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 some positive parts. It is no exaggeration to say that academic
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 broaden
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’ horizons because they can learn more about different advanced fields.
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 when they just focus on physical things they will not divert their attention from their study. It leads to good results on their exams.
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 but not least, it can open up opportunities for their future that will attract the eye of recruiters. In conclusion, from what
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 been discussed, studying academic
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 can benefit
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 opening more job chances, but people should stay alert to studying the wrong and right of one thing. It is necessary to reaffirm
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 position that whether
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teachers
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 should teach only academic
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 or not is a question that can be answered on a case-by-case
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. Families and schools should carefully weigh up the pros and cons of
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 problem before reaching a conclusion.
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