With the increasing demand for energy such as oil and gas, people start looking for new sources in remote and untouched places. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
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increasingly
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energy
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people
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sources
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energy
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the country's
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citizen
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civic
life
. I believe these advantages far outweigh any potential disadvantages.
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the main disadvantage that Change the verb form
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people
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energy
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sending
energy
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of
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to
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. These can Use synonyms
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the ecosystem
ecosystem
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ecosystems
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a new
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new sources
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people
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life
. Countries are run by the Use synonyms
economy
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energy
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people
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life
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lives
everyday
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every day
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sources
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energy
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the
outside nations. These lead to an imbalance of export and import goods and can cause an economic problem.
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sources
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animals
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this
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite