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people living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. what are those problems? should the goverment encourage people to move to regional town? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge

#people #cities #face #life #goverment #move #town
In our post-industrial
society
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 we can mention plenty of differences in life in large
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cities
sities
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cities
 and in
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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. Undoubtedly, I am strongly in
favor
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 of large
sities
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cities
sites
by
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for
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 many reasons.
First
 of all, large
sity
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city
site
 provides you huge opportunities, connected with business, networking, job. It is caused by the fact, that all companies are located in enormous
towns
. Certainly, you will not open your IT start-up in
regional
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a regional
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 town,
however
, even if you will do it, it will not develop, since
handful
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the handful
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 of
people
 in small
towns
are
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 already
employment
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 in factories and shops.
Secondly
, there are more facilities in bigger areas.
For example
, in large
cities
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,cities
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 you can visit
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the gym
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gym
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gyms
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, great
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restaurants
restaraunts
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restaurants
,
city
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and city
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 malls.
Moreover
, there are more events, concerts and
entartaiment
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entertainment
 in cities. Though,
by
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for
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 which reason
many
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do many
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people
 make their choice
on
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of
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 regional
towns
? In large
sities
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cities
 handful of
people
are
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already have their own car.
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Therefore
Thefore
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Therefore
,
second
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the second
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 disadvantage of
collossal
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colossal
towns
 -
air
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is air
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 and noise pollution. If
person
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a person
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 has weak immunity, he probably will suffer from pneumonia, bronchitis or other
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diseases
deseases
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diseases
. Yet, in
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the countrysides
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countryside
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countrysides
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 there is eco-friendly and fresh air. In brief, I want to
reitrate
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reiterate
 and say, that
goverment
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government
 should not encourage
people
 to move to regional
towns
 since
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a person
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person
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people
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 can clearly develop only in big cities with considerable possibilities.
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