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Employers should ensure that there are equal numbers of males and females in managerial posts in companies to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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New trends in management suggest that firms should recruit identical
numbers
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 of males and females in administrative positions.I entirely agree with
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 Vision. It is my view that companies which benefit from the same
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 of
men
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 and
women
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 who are in charge, could provide a more pleasant environment for their employees.
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, they are more likely to work efficiently.
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, from a psychological standpoint,
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 are able to concentrate on some aspects that
men
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 are not able to focus on.
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,
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 have distinctive powers that
women
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 are deprived of.
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 incorporating both genders into commanding positions could lead to a powerful directorial team.
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, research findings confirm that companies which have equal
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 of
men
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 and
women
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 earn
a double profits
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 their rivals.
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, some people claim that
men
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 have the inherent ability to manage. while
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women
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 lack. They firmly insist that since males are the only gender who can run a company and solve possible issues appropriately,
women
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 are not supposed to be in managerial posts.
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, I do not find
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 argument convincing as new valid surveys have shown that managing abilities are not inborn but
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can be acquired by any person including males and females. To conclude, I completely agree with recruiting equal
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 of masculine and feminine managers in companies because
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 approach leads to a better output.

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Word Count

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender balance
  • systemic biases
  • meritocracy
  • innovative
  • inclusive decision-making
  • diverse management teams
  • financial performance
  • employee satisfaction
  • corporate culture
  • progressive
  • equal opportunities
  • equal outcomes
  • quota systems
  • representation
  • leadership perspectives
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