Scientists advise people to lead a healthy lifestyle, but most people continue with unhealthy activities. Why do you think it is and what can do with it?e
In
the
recent years, young and old Correct article usage
apply
people
are having lots
of health issues and scientists advise to
lead a healthy Correct pronoun usage
them to
lifestyle
. Though there are many campaigns raising awareness for a healthy lifestyle
, people
tend to continue with unhealthy activities
. This
essay will examine the various reasons behind it and will put some solutions for the same.
Firstly
, long ago, people
were working in fields, walking long distances to reach their work and they were doing jobs which require lots
of energy. But nowadays, with modernisation, people
work in Add an article
an office
the office
office
and use their cars to travel. Fix the agreement mistake
offices
Hence
, they do not burn enough calories and consequently
they tend to become obese. Previously, Add a comma
,consequently
people
were eating food
which they were producing themselves, they were also
cultivating their own crops, were breedingCorrect your spelling
cattle
cattles
and hens. Now, Correct your spelling
cattle
most
of the Change preposition
for most
food
that we consume, we need to buy them. As a result
, most food
that we consume are
processed Change the verb form
is
food
, which contain
more fats, calories and sugars. Change the verb form
contains
Moreover
, people
prefer to buy ready-made food
like pizzas, burgers and other packed foods which are eventually worsening people
's health.
Additionally
, with the progression of technologies, people
's lifestyle
has changed immensely, people
prefer to watch movies on Netflix and eating
junk foods, Wrong verb form
eat
therefore
, they do not practice sports. Inadvertently, people
are suffering from high blood pressure, Correct your spelling
diabetes
diabete
and Correct your spelling
diabetes
lots
of cardiac complications. We are seeing lots
of campaigns to make people
aware of doing sport but this
is not helping a lot. Today, practicing
Change the spelling
practising
sport
has become expensive Fix the agreement mistake
sports
such
as such as
gyms, Remove the redundancy
apply
zumba
sessions, yoga and other Change the capitalization
Zumba
activities
which are unfortunately luxuries that people
cannot afford. The government should provide free activities
to people
in th
incapacity to afford Correct your spelling
the
such
fees and even more, many women having children have not enough support to practice sports, for example
, the government can provide free
nursery for their kids, allowing these women to practice some Add an article
a free
activities
In conclusion, I believe that there are
much more to be done by the local authorities to encourage Correct subject-verb agreement
is
people
to have a healthy lifestyle
. I am convinced that each individual is conscious of the consequences of unhealthy habits, so they should take the first
step to take control of their health and have the will to change their old habits.Submitted by amandachokupermal on
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