Scientists advise people to lead a healthy lifestyle, but most people continue with unhealthy activities. Why do you think it is and what can do with it?e

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In
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recent years, young and old
people
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are having
lots
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of health issues and scientists advise
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lead a healthy
lifestyle
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. Though there are many campaigns raising awareness for a healthy
lifestyle
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,
people
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tend to continue with unhealthy
activities
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.
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essay will examine the various reasons behind it and will put some solutions for the same.
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, long ago,
people
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were working in fields, walking long distances to reach their work and they were doing jobs which require
lots
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of energy. But nowadays, with modernisation,
people
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work in
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an office
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office
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and use their cars to travel.
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, they do not burn enough calories and
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consequently
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they tend to become obese. Previously,
people
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were eating
food
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which they were producing themselves, they were
also
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cultivating their own crops, were breeding
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cattle
cattles
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cattle
and hens. Now,
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of the
food
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that we consume, we need to buy them.
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, most
food
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that we consume
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processed
food
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, which
contain
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more fats, calories and sugars.
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,
people
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prefer to buy ready-made
food
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like pizzas, burgers and other packed foods which are eventually worsening
people
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's health.
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, with the progression of technologies,
people
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's
lifestyle
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has changed immensely,
people
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prefer to watch movies on Netflix and
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junk foods,
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, they do not practice sports. Inadvertently,
people
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are suffering from high blood pressure,
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diabetes
diabete
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diabetes
and
lots
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of cardiac complications. We are seeing
lots
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of campaigns to make
people
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aware of doing sport but
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is not helping a lot. Today,
practicing
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sport
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sports
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has become expensive
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as
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gyms,
zumba
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sessions, yoga and other
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which are unfortunately luxuries that
people
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cannot afford. The government should provide free
activities
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to
people
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in
th
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the
incapacity to afford
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fees and even more, many women having children have not enough support to practice sports,
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, the government can provide
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nursery for their kids, allowing these women to practice some
activities
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In conclusion, I believe that there
are
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much more to be done by the local authorities to encourage
people
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to have a healthy
lifestyle
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. I am convinced that each individual is conscious of the consequences of unhealthy habits, so they should take the
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step to take control of their health and have the will to change their old habits.

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