Job application is controversial. Discuss your opinions on both views.

My previous emails are mainly
inquiry
emails to ask for
information
such
as services
in
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on
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the campus, or
information
related to the courses.
However
, the purpose of
this
email
is to apply for a
job
, so there are some differences in the structure and format that I should follow.
Firstly
, because
this
is a
job
inquiry
email
,
thus
the resume should be attached to provide more detailed
information
about ourselves
for
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to
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the employers.
Secondly
,
this
type of
email
also
requires sufficient
information
about our
skills
or
experiences
in the past that can make us a strong candidate for the position.
Thirdly
, to write
this
type of
email
, we should
also
have prior knowledge about the target
company
and mention that
information
appropriately in the opening of the
email
.
Lastly
,
formal
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a formal
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tone is a must for
this
kind of
email
because our receiver is not someone
that
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whom
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we have an established relationship with and
moreover
, a formal tone guarantees
a
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good respect to the employers, which may increase our chances
for
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getting accepted for the
job
. Through writing a
job
inquiry
email
for
this
assignment, I have learned many useful tips about how to write a good
inquiry
email
.
Firstly
, there is a specific structure for a
job
inquiry
email
that we should follow. In more detail, it should include the following parts: greeting, qualifications, details, call to action,
closing
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and closing
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.
Secondly
, I
also
learn some important tips that can make a
job
inquiry
email
stronger,
such
as (1) naming the resume following the format “resume_[name]” to make it easier for employers, (2) starting the
email
with our prior knowledge regarding the
company
to show our interest in that
company
(3) paying high attention to grammar and punctuation of the
email
because a small mistake may send undesirable signals to the recruiter.
Thirdly
,
this
email
also
teaches me that for
this
kind of
email
, we should emphasize
on
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our
skills
and
experiences
in the past and how these relate specifically to the
job
. Actually, before
this
assignment, I only focus on mentioning my
experiences
but do not pay much attention to how these
experiences
benefit the target
company
and I realize that
this
is a big mistake.
Lastly
, through
this
assignment, I
also
learn significant tips to enhance the formality of an
email
,
such
as using formal words, do not use
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contraction
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,
using
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and using
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appropriate
greeting
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and closing, … In the future, there are aspects that I will have to pay attention to if I have to write a
job
inquiry
email
again.
Firstly
, I will try to use a formal tone in my
email
and carefully consider the choices of words, greeting and closing parts, …
Secondly
, I will follow a specific structure for a
job
inquiry
email
and include all necessary parts.
Thirdly
, because
this
kind of
email
aims to apply for a
job
, I will provide sufficient
information
about relevant qualifications,
experiences
,
skills
and how these apply to a potential
job
.
Moreover
, I will show specific examples to illustrate the level of these
skills
and
this
may bolster the strength of my application.
Lastly
, I will
also
consider other aspects to guarantee a good
email
,
such
as keeping paragraphs short, using one idea for each paragraph,
avoiding
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grammar or spelling errors…
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