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The best way to understand other cultures is to work for a multinational organization. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#cultures #work #organization
To connect or become familiar with other
cultures
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can
work
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 company but
also
, we can approach it in many ways.
Such
 as seeing some documentary movies or educating in some courses at the university.
Hence
, to achieve the best answer, we should consider some of the most common examples in a broader context.
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 hand, the
initially
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 way to understand foreign
cultures
 is
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 to know their language.
Then
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above our can education in the History course of the others countries.
Nevertheless
,
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 help us to open
wide
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 horizon opposite ourselves.
For instance
, some of my foreign friends came to Iran.
Likewise
, they had been studying to
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 Persian
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 start to go to other cities to study and learn
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 massive culture. I vividly remember one of them started to learn
Iranian
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 instrument “Setar”.
On the other hand
, the
second
 way is
watching
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 some famous documentary movies.
In addition
, we can read some history books. As both of them let us
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become familiar and knows any angels of their culture.
For example
,
National
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 Geography channel let me know about the variety of foreign
cultures
. As long as I see
this
 channel, I know
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the slum village
of
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 Africa, what do they do, and I know about their traditional food, clothes and music. The other way is to
work
 for a multinational organization. Due to
this
 job, you have to learn another language.
Hence
, you can learn about different
cultures
. A shining example of the staff, who
work
 in the Shell company can be mentioned.
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 conclusion,
although
 we can understand other
cultures
 to
work
 for an international business, we can achieve it
by
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 various ways. So,
this
 is shown plain as day I disagree
by
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this
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