Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

In today’s era, it is common for
people
to be having some problems in their lives. Some individuals are thinking it is good to
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and
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, few of them are having
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to work and change
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circumstances.
Further
in my opinion, I agree with the
second
statement that
people
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struggle continue and
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not accept any rough era.
To begin
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that after so many
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in life and having
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journey of struggle
people
are
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those failure
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in their lives.
For example
, My friend
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applied
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and he ended up with refusals ultimately he gives up
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more.
Moreover
, some individuals are really afraid to go for more and having less moral support
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them to the condition where they have to used to
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this
situation
. On the other side, it is fine to say try is the key
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success. Many
people
are having a mindset to never
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give up
giveup
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give up
on any
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. Those
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of
people
never
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and take things for granted. To justify the same there is an example, Rana has lost his all money in his business, but he never
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give up
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gave
and
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working and focusing on new businesses,
finally
he is
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successful businessman in the UAE. I believe, Every successful person must
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faced those times in their life journey.
This
mind approach will serve other human beings
also
to share positivity in
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society. In conclusion, as we discussed both views in
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paragraphs. Some
people
are giving up and accepting those situations due to less moral support and scare to take risks. Whereas, some
people
are having
mindset
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to keep consistent and try for
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time. They are getting good results
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this
mind. I strongly think that
people
who keep
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to try are more good than
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accept
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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