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The chart illustrates the proportion of the world
population
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 in four countries, namely
India
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,
China
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,
US
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the US
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 and
Japan
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, in 1950 and 2002, and predictions for 2050. Overall,
China
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 and
India
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 accounted for the highest
population
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 among these four countries respectively, whereas
Japan
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's
population
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 was the least in 1950 and 2002. Between 1950 and 2002, the percentage of residents in
India
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 increased slightly from 15% to less than a fifth. The other figures,
on the other hand
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, declined by approximately 3% in
China
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, USA and
Japan
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. At
last
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, the projections for 2050 show a change in the ranking,
in other words
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, in 2050,
China
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 will not consider the highest
population
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 ,for the fell to about 15%, meanwhile, It can be seen that the figures for
India
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 will surge significantly to roughly 18%.
USA
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The USA
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 will remain constant, and
japan
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population
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 will halve in the projection for 2050.
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