A glance at the two line graphs provided reveals a change
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the number of runners between 2000 and 2009 and a difference
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of
people
who run on time and run for
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line or target in the given period. Generally, more and more training
people
emerged and chose an
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type to run.
More specifically, standing somewhere in the vicinity of 35% in 2000,
then
the percentage of training
people
fluctuated from 35% to 45% over the subsequent 5 years and reached a peak of 46% in 2005.
Furthermore
, it was a gradual drop of 5% to 2009.
Concerning the
second
graph, we can see immediately that the proportion of runners training on time climbed exponentially from 92% to 96% during a 4-year period to 2004.
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by 4% to 2006, followed by an increase to 97% in 2008 and remained stable to 2009.
On the other hand
, during the period given experienced a stable value in the percentage of
people
who run for target and standard lines.
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of the
environment
has been highlighted as a matter of urgent public concern. While
people
maintain that protecting the
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the government not
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citizens
. As far as I am concerned, I am supportive of the argument that governments and
citizens
should be jointly responsible for environmental protection.
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with politicians because they have a huge impact
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everyone. It is no exaggeration to say that
people
who are in the public council should launch campaigns in raising
people
’s awareness of the seriousness of
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the
environment
.
For instance
, there are some lessons on “how important the
environment
is” or some activities - “ green day” - planting more trees.
Additionally
,
besides
raising awareness of
citizens
laws should be set out not only to regulate corporation behaviours but
also
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their operations more environmentally friendly.
For example
, if we don't put away trash in the correct places,
people
have to be punished
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money.
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this
problem and be a mirror for everyone.
Following
this
,
people
who live in a country or city should be responsible too.
Firstly
, they should have a notification about their actions.
People
have to save water or light when they do not use them.
Moreover
, they pay more attention to environmentally friendly goods and change their habits - planting more trees,
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in events about protecting the
environment
.
Although
they just contribute a little but just imagining that much little collapse
then
will have a huge impact
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their habitat.
In conclusion, from what has been discussed, it is necessary to reaffirm the writer’s position that it is not true if it is just the responsibility of the government. It might lead to
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impact. Tackling
this
problem requires the commitment of both politicians and
citizens
.