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As air travel has become cheaper, more and more people are travelling abroad for their vacations instead of visiting places in their own country. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#air #travel #people #vacations #places #country
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The given tables compare five different European
countries
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 in terms of the turnover of fair trade-labelled coffee and
bananas
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 in 1994 and 2004, and units are measured in millions of euros. Overall, it is noticeable that the
sales
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 of coffee all rose in the five
countries
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 from 1994 to 2004, whereas only three nations witnessed an increase in the
sales
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 of
bananas
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 in the same given period. Looking
first
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 at the turnover of coffee, the greatest growth can be seen in the UK, climbing from only 1.5 to 20, and that of Switzerland
also
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 had a twofold increase, rising from 3 to 6 in the given period. As for Denmark, Belgium and Sweden, all three
countries
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 had relatively marginal growth, none of their
sales
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 increased by over 1 million. Moving on to
bananas
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, the
sales
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 of
bananas
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 in the UK climbed from 15 in 1994 to 47 in 2004, going up by 32, which was the largest growth among all
countries
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.
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, Switzerland and Denmark are the only two
countries
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 that increased over 3 million in the
sales
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 of
bananas
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, except the UK. As for Belgium and Sweden, both experienced a decrease in the given period, decreasing from 1.8 to 1 and 2 to 0.9
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic boost
  • destination countries
  • hospitality
  • cultural exchange
  • global understanding
  • carbon emissions
  • global warming
  • sustainable development
  • local tourism
  • domestic tourists
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