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Despite the increased access to education, a significant number of people cannot read or write. What are the disadvantages and what action should the government take?

#access #education #people #action #government
it's undeniable of the
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government's
goverment's
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government's
 efforts in reducing
Illiteracy
 rates.
besides
 that, there is a big number
people
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of people
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are
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who are
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 still not able to read and write.
this
 issue will lead to many drawbacks. in my view,
i
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 believe that
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government
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 should have more measures to cope with it. the
illiteracy
 rates have a huge impact
to
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on
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the economic
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economic
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economy
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 as well as the growth
rate
 of a
country
. taking
singapore
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 as
example
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,
this
country
 has spent most of
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the tax
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 revenue on investing
education
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in education
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.
as a result
, we are seeing an unimaginable improvement in economics and
others part
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 of
country
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the country
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. another reason why
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government
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 should be preferable for reducing
illiteracy
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the illiteracy
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rate
to
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is to
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 decline commit crime
rate
. people who are not able to read and write has
tendency
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a tendency
the tendency
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 to commit crime unconsciously.
for example
,
africa
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Africa
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coutries
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countries
 have
highest
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rate
 of
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committing
commiting
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committing
crime
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a crime
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 in the world where the number
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people
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of pople
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pople
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people
 who can read or write rates just take a very minimal
percen
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per cent
price
 of the
country
's population.
that is
 why the
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government
goverment
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government
 should have immediate ways to deal with
this
 issue. to be specific, the
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government
gorvement
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government
 should reduce tuition
fee
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fees
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 or be free for all
citizen
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citizens
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. it will encourage
the
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apply
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people to study. a developed
country
where
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that
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 have
lowest
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the lowest
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illiteracy
rate
.
in other words
, the
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government
goverment
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government
 should focus on education and reduce
illierate
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illiterate
illiteracy
.
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