Some groups, such as poor people or people from rural area find it is difficult to access the university education. Universities should make it especially easy for the students come from the rural areas get an access to the university. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days, studying
university
degree is not as luxurious as it used to be in the past.
Although
more and more
students
are joining
university
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, there are still significant barriers for people who are not rich and lives in
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rural area. I strongly believe that
universities
should encourage those
students
to start their degree and to fulfil their completion. It is undeniable to say that there is a significant relationship between a high level of degree and a high earning salary.
Besides
,
this
privilege is only given to people who can afford to pay the expensive tuition fees. Everyone should have a fair opportunity to study
further
at
university
by offering
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scholarship
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or low rates of
student
loans. From the perspective of the government,
for
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being poor is inheritable, and
this
can cause a lot of crimes and financial problems which are not beneficial to the country.
Students
who live a long distance from a city can encounter some significant difficulties too in getting to the city. Having a long journey to school
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one's performance, and it is unfair for rural
students
. Many
universities
all over the world are introducing well-priced
student's
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dormitory
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dormitories
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,
moreover
, some offer a portion of substitution of rent
fee
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fees
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near the campus.
For example
, since the pandemic, a vast majority of
universities
started
online
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study and you can join classes without any restriction
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your location. In conclusion, It is definitely less beneficial for
students
from poor family backgrounds or rural regions to study at
university
.
However
, it is extremely important to be given a fair opportunity to any
students
. For supporting them, I insist that government and
universities
should work together to introduce great perks for
students
such
as
student
dormitory, online courses,
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and inexpensive
student
loans.
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