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Countries should start using nuclear power as their main source of energy; fossil fuels (i.e. coal, oil and gas) are not going to last forever and nuclear power is the cheapest alternative. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nuclear
energy
 comes from splitting atoms in a reactor to heat water in a stream, turn a turbine and generate electricity. Some
people
 believe that countries should start using nuclear
power
 as their main source of
energy
 as fuels are not going to
last
 eternally and nuclear
power
 is the cheapest alternative. In the essay, we will discuss
about
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the pros and cons of
this
 statement Actually, in many countries, nuclear
energy
 is being used to produce electricity and the advantage of using
this
 particular type of
energy
 is that it fights climate change as it provides
carbon free
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 to the environment.
Additionally
, nuclear
power
 provides job opportunities to
people
. Inadvertently, nuclear station requires a large scale for setting up
its
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 stations and
it
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they
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 require lots of precautionary measures and expert to operate
such
 type of
energy
. As
such
,
government
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the government
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 should sometimes relocate
people
 to other places to construct
such
massive
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 industry.
Nevertheless
, in Ukraine, in
the
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1980, there was the incident of
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the Chernobyl
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Chernobyl
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 nuclear station explosion which
have
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caused
many
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damage
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 to the area and
also
have
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killed many
people
 due to high radiation. I believe that there are other natural resources which can be used apart from nuclear
such
 as solar
energy
, and wind
energy
 to produce
power
. Nowadays, many industries are favouring and providing
facility
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 to individuals to produce their own
energy
 with
photovoltaic
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a photovoltaic
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 solar
panel
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panels
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 to be installed on the roof of their houses. These
people
 can
also
 sell the excess
of
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energy
 produced to the authorities. Personally, I do not favour the use of nuclear
power
, but over the years, we have seen that nuclear
power
are
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 providing sustainability to the environment.
However
, the government should continue exploring other natural ways to produce electricity or
energy
.
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