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Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

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The given flowchart illustrates the process of how solar power is turned into domestic used
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 through solar panels. Overall, the process can be divided into two main stages, which are the gathering
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 and the other is the distribution
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, it is noticeable that sun energy undergoes a series of processes and eventually turns into
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. Looking
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 the solar panel absorbs the solar power from the sun and transforms it into DC current, following
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, the DC current enters the inverter, where it transforms the DC current into AC current and controls the
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 and production. Moving onto the distribution
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, the
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 produced in the aforementioned
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 distributed through the electrical panel.
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, via the utility meter, the excessively produced solar
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 is transmitted back to the grid, while if the household depletes the
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 generated by the solar panels, the grid can offer the
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 to compensate for the depletion.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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