In many countries, more and more young people are leaving school and unable to find jobs after graduation. What problems do you think youth unemployment will cause to the individual and society? Give reasons and make some suggestions.

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going to negatively affect them in many

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enough money to continue their studies and vacancies in companies with high requirements for their degrees. To solve

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problem government need support urgently needed to ensure the future of the young.

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themselves as well as the community.

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joblessness is a cause of serious

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can not be a part of the community. It leads they could get some mental diseases which able to hinder their

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, for the society or whole , with the increasing

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government should invest more money in education.

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knowledge and skill to get a suitable job.

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able to carry out the main missions. In conclusion,

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high

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unemployment

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for all countries and solutions should be urgently deployed to solve

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problem.

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In many countries, more and more young people are leaving school and unable to find jobs after graduation. What problems do you think youth unemployment will cause to the individual and society? Give reasons and make some suggestions.

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when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens any more satisfied.

Most people accept that we now live in a globalised world but not everyone agrees this is beneficial. To what extent is globalisation a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answers and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience

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