Individuals can do nothing to change society. New developments can be only brought about by governments and large institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays

world

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is controlled and

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run

runned

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run

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by government and strong institutions

they

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that

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can introduce new changes, that can steer the destiny of many and affect

there

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life. While individuals can work on the

change

, they can try to

change

the

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society

but it takes time for that

change

to get into effect. A government or large institutions are basically a group of people working towards the same goal, working behind the same ideology.

This

essay will argue about the changes that an individual or institution can bring

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the

society

and which one of them is more effective in bringing these changes. There has been a saying, If any person is working on a particular goal

then

there is a

chance

that he will fail many times, before even achieving the goal. But if he

try

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hard enough he can achieve it. The question is if that goal is big enough like changing

the

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society

. Can he do it? And how many tries will it take to even achieve that goal? The answer is it's not easy, nothing in life is. But that's the beauty of life . There is a

chance

that his goal may come true and there is

also

chance

that it may not. So we can't be sure that he can actually achieve the goal of changing

the

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society

On the other hand

, if any organization is working on the same goal of bringing

the

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change

or introducing

new

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thing.

Then

there is a certainty, that

the

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particular

change

will come

for

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example: If the concept of digital

india

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India

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, was only a dream of a particular individual

then

there may have been a

chance

that

particular

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dream may not even come true. But when

this

dream is supported by various

organization

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there is a

change

. Maybe, at some time in the

future

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we can even hope to achieve it, it will take time but it will come true. So the answer

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is changed

is changing

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change

doesn't matter how big or small it is, will come true if backed up by a group of people. But

same

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the same

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cannot be said about a

change

that is

supported by only a particular individual.

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3Word repetition
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Individuals can do nothing to change society. New developments can be only brought about by governments and large institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Some believe that new science related to criminal forensics should be used to look at old cases. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people argued that history is of little or no use. Others believe that studying history give many benefits. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.