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Any country should be able to sell goods to other countries without the restrictions of the government. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that all nations should have the right to buy and sell
goods
 to different parts of the world without any restriction or interference
of
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 the governments. In
this
 essay, I will analyze the perspective before arriving at my final conclusion. Apparently, there are several reasons why the government should let any
country
 sell
goods
 to other countries.
Firstly
, it will boost the economic growth of the
country
; since domestic manufacturers search for many markets which attract citizens from other countries, and some foreign investment as well.
As a result
, with that impact, the economy of the
country
 can be developed at a high speed.
Secondly
, without
the
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government limitation, many international companies will have a chance to sell their products which means the average cost of
goods
 will be lower due to no taxes.
Consequently
, more citizens will be able to buy more affordable
goods
 that can reduce the rate of poverty and hunger.
On the other hand
, there are still certain negative aspects
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 both citizens and companies when letting
this
 action happen.
Initially
,
people
 can face the danger of banned substances. To be more specific, if there is no testing or limitation, some bad
people
 will have the opportunity to put harmful substances not only in the food
,
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 but
also
 in the products
people
 use
everyday
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.
Therefore
, consumers will be the victims of these crimes and have to deal with sickness or death. In the
second
 place, there will be competition between local and international
business
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. Since some
people
who
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are
foreign-favored
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 and now the price of those products is
also
 low, it will be hard for the development of local companies. In conclusion, I personally disagree with
this
 proposal since it has many negative developments for one
country
, so it is advisable that the government impose strict control on the
goods
 which are exported and imported.
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